Swirl Antara

My edits are in bold . Single words/punctuation in bold just means that I changed that from something grammatically incorrect. Also, I was somewhat confused because this is just a ...

first off, your spelling and grammar definately could use some work. I've only read a few sentences and it's already distracting me from the actual story. Alright, I also think ...

This is a story that I won contest with, but I never got any comments on it so tell me what you think please!! Thanks By the way, it's not ...

Banned for being my age

Hello, I am a semi-new member (I've been on YWS for a week or 2...something like that) I'm 14 (almost sucks to have a late birthday) Happy thanksgiving everybody!! so ...

I agree, this could be either a prologue or a first chapter, as it would work both ways. I personally would probably keep it as a prologue because it isnt ...

A few edits from before. If you want to tell me to change something eg. description, please give a specific example. No offense to my other reviewers but "Description could ...

no more replies please, I get the point. I never have been much of a poet

I don't understand what you mean when you said (His weight is unimaginable -- a scarecrow's laugh) it just doesn't make sense to me. Good poem though!

You definitely do not have to have a prologue. They are a completely optional part of a story (so is an epilogue) For example, Tamora Pierce (a really good fantasy ...

(((I agree with the others, some more spacing would make it easier to read. My edits are in italics. and triple brackets))) CHAPTER 1 - PORT CHARLOTTE “ALL ABOARD!” the ...

When I write I feel like I am expressing myself and that people might pay attention. Writing is a way to tell the world how I feel. Writing means alot ...

hoodie,warm, pocket hwaket The hwaket is a red bird; it's face is rarely visible due to the hood-like feathers around it's face

good job, I really enjoyed it. I used to fence, so I knew what foil etc. meant, but an unknowing reader might be confused by some of your terminology. I ...

This is an excellent prologue from my opinion, but some parts were quite vague. Was that intentional? ...The Cursed are like shadows. {you said that "Only few can gain access ...